Chaotic_Thetis
Apprentice
Bleed me! For i have witnessed yet remained silent.Slay me! For i had your love and kept it.
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Post by Chaotic_Thetis on Feb 7, 2004 12:14:48 GMT -5
a/n: This is fairly old, not too old but old enough for me not to remember if i've posted it before, but here it is anyway, again maybe ~shrugs~
There've been many time When morals. . . I'd gladly trade for company And angels, Saw me crying. . . I'd thought I’d had my share of that, Then the wind howls The breath of God would bruise me And I’d see no angels to speak of. A lovers touch Has left me, torn yet ready For mount Olympus. . . For Osiris in the depths of the darkness Or for the shades in Hades. I weep, I cry... But oh my love I’ll never die. I am ready for spirits For vampires, For those who see the future and Claim to have lived past lives, They...who's intellect is encased In beauty, to endure for so many Years, an intellect that has all but destroyed Their heart. I am ready to take this pause My life has almost stopped And though i want to carry on i want To breathe, to breathe in the beauty of the darkness You left me in. And for this moment in time and space I'll rest, I’ll stop and look around... Scorned, Torn but moving on.
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Post by SilverEyes on Feb 7, 2004 20:10:34 GMT -5
The use of greek and egyptian myth adds to the poem in an indescribable way. Nice write.
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Post by bloodredtears on Feb 7, 2004 20:32:13 GMT -5
hey...i really enjoyed this piece ...i especially liked the part that went: that part really touched me! great job!
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Post by Tania on Feb 8, 2004 1:26:57 GMT -5
I thought this was simply beautiful. You have used mythology to bring evocative images of survival after heartbreak. I really enjoyed this. Tania
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Chaotic_Thetis
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Bleed me! For i have witnessed yet remained silent.Slay me! For i had your love and kept it.
Posts: 142
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Post by Chaotic_Thetis on Feb 9, 2004 14:15:15 GMT -5
Thank you much all, your kind words are greatly appreciated ^_^
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Post by richie on Feb 9, 2004 15:37:48 GMT -5
good poem from the heart richie
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Post by T.J. Barber on Feb 11, 2004 18:17:25 GMT -5
It was really good. I enjoyed it. I am glad that you have posted this here Thetis. You are a great poet when you want to be....Great write.
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sweetest17sin
Virtuoso
don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile!
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Post by sweetest17sin on Feb 12, 2004 1:42:47 GMT -5
that was really, really good! you have a lot of talent! nice job!
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Chaotic_Thetis
Apprentice
Bleed me! For i have witnessed yet remained silent.Slay me! For i had your love and kept it.
Posts: 142
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Post by Chaotic_Thetis on Feb 12, 2004 16:15:47 GMT -5
Graci much, i'll bare both comments in mind for future reference ^_^
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