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Post by bloodredtears on Dec 12, 2003 12:56:25 GMT -5
~~I wasn't sure which one this one went into the best, so I just put it here...it is a brand new poem...i haven't written in like 2 months...so i'm happy to be back in my groove!
Have You Loved
12/11/03
11:51 pm
Have you ever been in love
and tried to bury it deep?
Have you felt love's dark despair
that makes the toughest weep?
Have you ever wanted someone so much
and known they'd never be yours?
Have you tried to lock the emotions away
into air-tight, sealed doors?
Have you ever dreamed so much
that reality melted away?
Have you ever wanted to give it all up
in hopes that they would stay?
Have you ever been in love
so much that you could die?
Have you ever loved so much
all you could do is say goodbye?
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blueyes
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Amonst the Roses stands the purest daisy...
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Post by blueyes on Dec 16, 2003 15:41:40 GMT -5
Oh, how absolutely WONDERFUL!!!  AT first I weeped then rejoiced with understand  ... I understand this piece with my whole heart, it speaks right to me. Well done. |
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Post by bloodredtears on Dec 17, 2003 20:13:53 GMT -5
thank you much...glad you liked it!
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Post by SilverEyes on Jan 15, 2004 18:57:21 GMT -5
Well spoken and I can relate to both the slump and the poem.  |
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Post by bloodredtears on Jan 16, 2004 12:26:47 GMT -5
slumps really bite...but it seems the only time i can write is when i'm upset...which actually means that the slump is a good thing...but i just can't write which upsets me too! so, yeah...but thanks for the comments!
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Post by shadowling on Jan 17, 2004 12:42:18 GMT -5
relly strong pome you had here i think the last stanza rings most clearly though in my mind. Nice emotion through the whole poem and I like the repition you ised nicely done.
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Post by T.J. Barber on Feb 2, 2004 20:39:54 GMT -5
This was a truly inspirational poem. I enjoyed reading it. I see that it has been here a while and I apologize for not repling sooner. Thank you for posting this work of art.
God Bless, Tj
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Avatre
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Just around for the words...^.^
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Post by Avatre on Feb 2, 2004 21:15:32 GMT -5
exceptional. ^_^ I really liked it, especially the last stanza. "True pain is to watch someone you love, love someone else...because you gave them up."
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Post by bloodredtears on Feb 2, 2004 22:06:29 GMT -5
thanks for the replies everyone....it means a lot to me!
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Leah
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Post by Leah on Feb 4, 2004 8:50:57 GMT -5
Love is a word used so much. True love is a feeling so deep within ones heart and soul that it is felt thru out. Love is like ghosts, you hear people speak of it, but few have actually seen. A word to be used for real and not in joke. Love is a awesome feeling. Love is like a eternal flame burning, and never goin out. Great works.
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sweetest17sin
Virtuoso
don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile!
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Post by sweetest17sin on Feb 12, 2004 0:59:23 GMT -5
oh wow...i really liked this poem.
"Have you ever been in love
so much that you could die?
Have you ever loved so much
all you could do is say goodbye?"
that is exactly how i am feeling right now. once again...nice job!
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AT first I weeped then rejoiced with understand 
... I understand this piece with my whole heart, it speaks right to me. Well done.
