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Post by Tania on Feb 5, 2004 19:45:36 GMT -5
Hunger has turned to ashes Emotion lies limp like a discarded piece of cloth And the burgeoning of trust has come to nothing Too rushed like instant coffee To wake in realization That it is too late To patch up what could have been What if and but… Is lost on a mountain of regret… And climbing out of the morass of hurt To form a new future and new hope To bind the heart tightly against emotion So tight that it will squeeze – to remind it That instant lust and emotion Has a price too high – for so cheap an encounter
Tania Walsh
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Post by SilverEyes on Feb 5, 2004 20:04:04 GMT -5
Too true, too true, I like the imagery you used and it is a nice piece.
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Post by bloodredtears on Feb 6, 2004 0:39:02 GMT -5
i really enjoyed this piece...you hit on the heart of some of the problems people face with love...great job!
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Eclipse
Apprentice
It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time.
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Post by Eclipse on Feb 6, 2004 18:45:24 GMT -5
i liked the similie with the instant coffee. heh. that was cool.
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Post by Tania on Feb 8, 2004 1:38:00 GMT -5
Thank you for your lovely comments about my poem. I really appreciate it. Tania
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Post by T.J. Barber on Feb 11, 2004 18:18:57 GMT -5
I enjoyed reading this piece. It intrigued me to no end. You are a wonderful poet...Keep it up!
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sweetest17sin
Virtuoso
don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile!
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Post by sweetest17sin on Feb 12, 2004 1:41:42 GMT -5
that was really good! nice job!
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amberputis
Virtuoso
~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~
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Post by amberputis on Feb 14, 2004 17:22:39 GMT -5
i enjoyed every line, i was very impressed, awesome job
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