it's me

[pipes]

what is it that you think you'll find?
what is it that your chasing?
i've trapped myself inside my mind
while sitting still, i'm racing

i'm searching through my memories
of the happy times we shared
rememb'ring what you said to me
before you felt so scared

so what the f*ck is wrong with you?
i'm through with asking nice
you love to take your own sweet time
but it's me who pays the price

it's me who sits and watchs
as you hit on every guy
its' me who stays to comfort
when you break down and cry

it's me whos seen you making out
at a party in plain view
its me, dont dare deny it
who takes the blame off you

so i ask an honest question:
are you proud of what you've done?
pulled me in so close
just to turn your tail and run

you've done it more than once
but seem to live with no regret
and its clear to see you know
just how deep this pain can get
so tell me why your still around
do you think this does me good?
you think i can just up and leave
well i pray one day i could





first peice of mine im posting on this site, hope you all like it. i think the ending's kinda shakey though, and i'm sure there are other flow problems, any advice more than welcome.


pipes

[alostandbrokensoul]

I though it was great and a good question to ask as well many wonder if love is right for them yet cant walk away keep it up!!

[Seth]

Wow. I love it. In my family there is a lot of this, though most of my relatives are the b*stards that use and mentally abuse good-hearted people... :sigh:
Bitter, sad, and yet etched with realism, because there are a lot of sorry people out there that have no shame for hurting others-in any way.
Fantastic piece.

[T.J. Barber]

This piece was really good. I enjoyed the rhyme scheme, it flowed together awesomely. Great write!!

TJ