HeartBreak On 5th And Main

[DeadByMorning]

Standing in the pouring rain
I wonder, will I see you again
I don't know this foreign terrain
On my words my blood doth stain.

Sitting on the bridge of my end
My heart, will it ever mend?
Downward spirals, sorrow doth send
Waiting in vain, just for a friend.

Bleeding through the crimson sheet
So fierce and cold my heart doth beat
As I walk alone this empty street
Somehow feeling like a dirty cheat.

Waiting on 5th and Main
Feeling like I'm on a chain
Of your love, fighting in vain,
For my heart cannot take this strain.

You watch me bleed, not even a tear,
You do not even see my fear
There is no life left here
Why should you care my dear?

My heart's gone cold and black as ice
A little consideration might be nice
But through my heart your words doth slice
Hurt me once, hurt me twice.

I always end up coming back to you
Even after all you put me through
You'd think I would get a clue
That all you care about is you.

[bloodredtears]

this is a really great piece...you did very well with the rhyming...i liked the message in it alot to...the last stanza is my favorite

[Seth]

This one totally blows my mind away.
Indeed, the flow and rhyming is done
exceptionally well,
and is all wonderfully written...
It's hard to pick but the
last two stanzas are my favorite.
Fantastic way of ending this-
this is absolutely mesmorizing and
captivating.

[NeverMore]

I sat here reading this over and over. It amazes me how I could feel this work in a place I try to hide away from the world. If you have read my works, you know I do not hide it that well. This made me feel a little less alone when I think of a certain time in my life. I will never really understand why we love when it hurts, but I am certain we will keep doing it.

Wonderfull wonderfull work! I truely look forward to reading more. Thank you!

[alostandbrokensoul]

I have to agree this is a wonderful piece and lots of people are shallow when it comes to "love"
nice job

[rinna(on leave...for eternity)]

ooh, i enjoyed this so much! i like the control you held on the rhyme without sacrificing the message - it flowed very nicely.