Love killed me

[alostandbrokensoul]

You stabbed me in the chest
but missed this heart of mine
but it doesnt matter anymore
because I'm already dead inside.

I could have lived a thousand lives
Each better than the first
I could have died a thousand deaths
but I chose love, and that was the worst.

You left me here,
clinging to your knife
as if holding on to it
would bring back my life.

So now my blood has puddled
I'm lying in this pool
of the blood that you have spilt
I was such a fool.

I've learned a valuable lesson
love is a diesease
the heart is just its carrier
and you can never be put at ease.

So now my breath is getting shorter
I'm feeling really cold
I should have known not to love you
I shouldn't have been so bold.

Your love was like salt,
being rubbed into my wounds
already carved by your anger
your ever changing moods.

I thought that I loved you
I thought that you loved me
but love is a mistake
and love killed me.

[Seth]

alostandbrokensoul said:

You left me here,
clinging to your knife
as if holding on to it
would bring back my life.


I've learned a valuable lesson
love is a diesease
the heart is just its carrier
and you can never be put at ease.

Love the emotion that really drips off each line and word,
I can feel the pain and relate closely to the question and reality of what love really is.
Awesome write,
as always, you portray the aching heart
clearly and effectively.

[Mwalvbk]

This is very emotional and dramatic. Very well written, and certainly conveys your message. Love can be very dangerous, more so than most people would think.

[T.J. Barber]

Seth's reply could not have said it better. I loved this piece. Love truly is the closest thing to death. It can give life and it can take it away. Love has it's own master. The person under it's spell is suspended between life and death. It's kind of ironic, don't ya think?

Great Job! Tj

[cherryXchapstick]

the emotion in this is wonderful. i can relate to this well, and reading this makes me feel the pain all over again. you've done an amazing job with this.

[Wickedblades666]

i am in a state of awe by this amazing poem, and your ability to express yourself, your hurt, your pain, in your works is very shocking...and i love the razor thing, the whole symbolism involved...i dont use razor blades myself, but i occasionally...nm...great write, and please dont stop feeding us all the nector of your soul, your poetry.

[undiscovered417]

wow...super powerful poem. great job!

[culupa]

great jod i love this picece it talks to me

[robot08]

great job, it was really good. the emotion was everywhere.

[faithmairee]

This is a very sorrowful piece with great emotional impact...i am sure there are many people who have felt this way at some point in their lives after realizing when love dies, it's birth was an error...great job!

faith