ill-fated love

[nevadasky]

you used to steal my breath
away
leaving only enough air to
sustain my racing
heart as it soared into the
Milky Way

you once lit a fire in me
with that rich body of
yours
your bones the kindling

that even now that you're
gone
sustain me still
today

I touch my face pretending
it is yours
and as I take a picture of my
life

looking through the lens
I see you
there

casting a shadow on your
memory I remember how much
I loved you

allowing me to love myself
a little
more

nevadasky (c)

[Alex'z Death Chic]

hmm... it was nice... would make a good song...

[nevadasky]

thanks alex, a bunch ;D

nevadasky

[Mwalvbk]

I like the format of this one, it's very good, keep it up!

[nevadasky]

thank you eternalflame,

nevadasky

[T.J. Barber]

Yes, the layout of this piece fit it very well.
I see room for little improvement.
I think that this one was as close as perfect as one could wish to get something they wrote.
Good job, Tj

[nevadasky]

thanks TJ, and yes, there is always room for improvement...if not, we all would be Robert Frost. ;D

your comments mean a lot...

sky