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Post by †.(V)ôô|\|£Î†ƒåcë.† on Feb 24, 2005 20:59:48 GMT -5
In these few seconds I tell my short tale Of a rose soon to die And its soul Crumpled and frail
As its petals Are still Red And its thorns are still sharp And its stem is still strong Its heart is about to stop
Tortured and tattered All alone by itself Inside not so healthy Awaiting to turn brown Or maybe it would be quicker To slowly drown
And only few Things cared for this Shattered Flower Not enough love For her to stay profound
So to end her pain She pulled off her thorn As she quivered And her query Was only of death And the only thing In her head Was V O I C E S
So she cut off her petals Of beauty and dismes As she was soon bleeding This Beautiful rose Was sure soon to die.
And as I awoke From this Taunting Dream I realized how real it seemed And as I fixed my eyes On the knife by my bed I noticed my wrists Were covered in red.
.::Just as the Rose that was now dead::.
First poem here hope you guys like it XD
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Post by X x K e l Z x X on Feb 25, 2005 0:14:12 GMT -5
This is excellent, you rock girl, welcome to Poet Club, my name is Kelly.
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Post by †.(V)ôô|\|£Î†ƒåcë.† on Feb 25, 2005 13:29:09 GMT -5
Thank you =D Glad you enjoyed it. Meh friends name is kelley. Anyways Nice to meet you. I will try and post as much feed back as posible XD. Thanks for the warm welcome!
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Post by Seth on Feb 28, 2005 1:03:46 GMT -5
Hey, this is cool. So endearing and so entrancing, stellar imagery, and phenomenal story-telling. You really know how to pull the reader in and keep them hooked. This does rock. Wlecome to the site, and what a way to come in.
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Post by †.(V)ôô|\|£Î†ƒåcë.† on Feb 28, 2005 22:27:00 GMT -5
Heh Thank you =). Glad to be here, and I am glad you were hooked on it XD. someone at school told meh it gave them chills Lol.
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Post by X x K e l Z x X on Mar 1, 2005 20:02:55 GMT -5
Welcome again, great write here, I love this
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Post by †.(V)ôô|\|£Î†ƒåcë.† on Mar 3, 2005 2:28:59 GMT -5
Thanks again =)
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Post by QueenofDarkness on Mar 3, 2005 15:17:30 GMT -5
WOW! The imagery and feeling put into this poem is awesome. A lot of people don't know how to connect with their readers but you did a great job. Along with Kelly, I welcome you to Poet Club and my name is Jeana. Great start!!!
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Post by †.(V)ôô|\|£Î†ƒåcë.† on Mar 3, 2005 17:45:04 GMT -5
nice to meet you =) and thank you for the welcome =D Glad you enjoyed it.
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Post by Angel Of Music on Mar 8, 2005 17:43:32 GMT -5
fantastic imagery and i love the darker tone. i love the metaphor as well. welcome!!
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Post by alostandbrokensoul on Mar 14, 2005 15:58:00 GMT -5
wonderful!!! i love it!!
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Post by AnSidhe on Apr 6, 2005 23:12:15 GMT -5
AWesome. It gave me the chill that I enjoy oh so much . . . I love this poem!
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