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Post by alostandbrokensoul on Sept 14, 2004 16:11:07 GMT -5
Not quit sure if the title goes with the poem oh well.
The rope that's wrapped around me if cutting through my skin and Ive started to wonder where the pain has been.
Ive grown numb to this because its happened before youve raped me of my innocence then shoved me out the door.
I can not tell my mother because she wears your ring you are not my father but that doesnt mean a thing.
When ever you are lonely and need a little comfort you come and take me and again I am hurt.
I can not tell my friends they just wouldnt understand the pain you cause me on death I depend.
Ive tried to kill me-self cut the pain away but I keep living my life goes on the same.
You ask me questions like "My beautiful why do you bleed" but you dont care you still do your dirty deed.
Ive grown traumatized by reality try to hide away but you still find me and f*ck me anyway.
Im sorry mom that I hurt you but this is my goodbye it wasnt your fault that I had to die.
You see mommy dearest I tried to save your soul but the man you love made me pay the toll.
He raped me of my innocence time and time again and this is my way out. he's the one to blame.
So please dont cry for me just make him pay for ruining my life and making this my last serenade.
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Post by rinna(on leave...for eternity) on Sept 15, 2004 1:26:18 GMT -5
hey,
this piece is so sorrowful, i can only imagine...
the title fits perfectly with what you have to say. though shouldn't it be serenade? give it a sweep for spelling and punctuation and it should be great.
.rk
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Post by bloodredtears on Sept 15, 2004 14:24:25 GMT -5
i agree with rinna, the title fits very well...this piece has a darkness to it that i couldn't begin to grasp, having never been in that situation...great job expressing it!
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Post by X x K e l Z x X on Sept 25, 2004 22:20:32 GMT -5
This is excellent, awesome write and portrayal here.
Kelz
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Post by _black phoenix_ on Nov 30, 2004 3:01:12 GMT -5
i truly hope that this is not an experience that you are going through and is simply a poem writen from different eyes.
this subject is a difficult one to touch upon.. its so easy to get lost within it all.
i hope that all goes well for you, alostandbrokensoul. keep up the emotional writing.
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