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Post by +Criminal Passion+ on Mar 3, 2004 3:07:28 GMT -5
His voice is praying in my mind… In empty bedroom every night I listen to those quiet sounds of rage. He’s here; the moon is cherry red, It looks like gods are going mad, I cannot sleep, nor can this passion fade.
There is no chance to run away Because his spirit orders, “Stay!” He’s chanting softly his demonic songs. He knows my soul, he knows i lied, And now he takes me for a ride To where he eternally belongs.
I cannot move, my heart has stopped, My life is pitilessly chopped, I sink in unforgiving burning eyes. Forgive me, Love, it’s not my fault Forgive me, Life… My soul is sold To that who never lives and never dies.
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Post by richie on Mar 4, 2004 4:57:57 GMT -5
brillient, a real sense of place-imagery and fine poetic flow, powerful and dark yet sad too, I enjoyed this a lot. regards Richie.
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Post by Dreamcatcher on Mar 5, 2004 6:45:26 GMT -5
Very dark with exceptionally vivid images. Good work....Meg
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Post by +Criminal Passion+ on Mar 5, 2004 17:54:27 GMT -5
thanks ))
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Post by SilverEyes on Apr 17, 2004 3:20:46 GMT -5
Beautiful and strong imagery. The last stanza brings the piece together very well and really drives everything home.
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Post by rinna(on leave...for eternity) on Apr 28, 2004 20:57:44 GMT -5
great imagery, great flow. x rinna x
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