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Post by Sathien on Mar 15, 2004 17:14:14 GMT -5
The Kettle
It whistled the tune of zero hour exhaled the fog of final remorse spilled sweet blood of the young and the innocent into your cup of brewed coffee
you inhale the scent of their fear sip the bitterness of their skin stripped of purity feel the hands of time mock your wrinkles
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the burning sensation it produced consume you and make you young again.
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Post by bloodredtears on Mar 15, 2004 22:42:15 GMT -5
wonderful piece...i really like the ending especially...great job!
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Post by leash on Mar 21, 2004 17:28:19 GMT -5
that second stanza was exceptional! i like how this piece looks visually.. it makes it very easy to get your rhythm. great work as usual, sath.
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Post by Deleted on Apr 9, 2004 16:48:36 GMT -5
I find it to be somewhat meaningful, for some odd reason. I thought it was neat. Great job.
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Post by T.J. Barber on Apr 13, 2004 19:48:48 GMT -5
I have nothing to say...."Interesting I guess"
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Post by T.J. Barber on Apr 13, 2004 19:49:49 GMT -5
I have nothing to say...."Interesting I guess"
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Post by rinna(on leave...for eternity) on May 12, 2004 1:10:08 GMT -5
well i liked it! that was a quirky metaphor you used...now on to the toaster!!!!!!! great job! x rinna x
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