Somber questions

[Alex'z Death Chic]

If dreary skies swept over you like swift winds
Then would you succumb to its forlorn sentiment?
If morbid emotions took over your heart
Then would you still evoke sheer passions from within?

If when melancholic angels whisper inaudible words to your ear
Then would you listen with your heart or with your soul?
If morose murmurs of shadows of your own making can be heard
Then would you listen or forsake their macabre moans?

If your world would crumble before your utmost moment
Then will desolate tears of pain flow down your cheeks?
If the melody of the glistening rain is enough for you to believe
Then will you try your preeminent attempts to hear its song again?

If the sun would shine on your gloomy day
Then will you squint away the harshness of its rays?
If it continues to shimmer your dark moments
Then will you, this time, take in its warmth?

If you see that rainbow amongst the glimmering clouds
Then will you let it brighten up your bleak exterior?
If in that pit of flames, a hand is outstreched to you
Then would you, damned, grasp it to be rescued?

[bloodredtears]

good piece...i love the questions it poses...this is a gentle reminder..we would like to keep it down to 3 posts in each forum per day per person so someone doesn't get bumped off the page...i really enjoy your writing...good job!

[Alex'z Death Chic]

oops... sorry... different time zones. I posted the other two last night... I thought it was a different day. Sorry again.

[bloodredtears]

my bad...should've looked closer at the dates on that...

[Eclipse]

i liked this. and you ask great questions.

If when melancholic angels whisper inaudible words to your ear
Then would you listen with your heart or with your soul?

^^ especially that one.

[SilverEyes]

Quite a profound write and it is wonderfully posed. Great write.

[leash]

well done.

i think that you could make this much better if you were to cut out the unneeded words. theres a lot of good stuff in there, but you seem to have way too much filler that distracts the readers from what is important.

.. but thats only my opinion.

great imagery. i really liked the tone of this piece.. your diction really helped out with that. keep it up.