Wolf
Apprentice
In the end, we will remember not the words of our enemies, but the silence of our friends.
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Post by Wolf on Feb 21, 2004 0:43:51 GMT -5
Apocalypse I
I. Following merriment and joy,
life, and fulfillment, I come seeking--
casting my mantle of darkness,
I end them--
A palpable aura of depression
surrounds me, proclaiming my identity;
incarnation of Death am I.
II. My being cries out in soul-wrenching agony
--I reach for peace, only to have it slip
cunningly away, taunting me with haunting
memories of ephemeral moments when it was
warm within my grasp to cherish and enjoy...
© T. GhostWolf Davidson, December 18, 1972
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amberputis
Virtuoso
~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~
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Post by amberputis on Feb 21, 2004 1:21:47 GMT -5
It almost sounds unfinished, but yet also intentionally with suspense. Another good one!
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Post by SilverEyes on Feb 21, 2004 1:35:01 GMT -5
I like the suspense that the end creates and the switch from the happiness to depression.
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Post by bloodredtears on Feb 21, 2004 4:40:39 GMT -5
well, what they said was what i was thinking...this is wonderfully done..great job!
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Deleted
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Post by Deleted on Mar 25, 2004 16:03:48 GMT -5
Chilling. To me, anyway. Depressing, too. I loved it. Great job.
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Post by John Barnett on Apr 7, 2004 16:21:07 GMT -5
This is very chilling and deep, nice work Ghost.
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Post by rinna(on leave...for eternity) on Apr 28, 2004 20:54:39 GMT -5
i agree, suspenseful, ended perfectly. leaving room for more in the next Apocalyptic episode?
x rinna x
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