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Post by MarieVulffe on Jan 8, 2004 22:45:45 GMT -5
DAMNATION
Blood runs Spirit burns Heads turn Then look away again
(I’ve forgotten)
Moon glows Agony throes No one knows Except the night and you
(What it’s like)
Harsh mistress Callous blisters Ragged fissures Scrawled across your skin
(To look)
Day breaks Body aches Limbs quake In the aftermath of sin
(At the moon)
Dumb and blind Stumbling behind Follow the line Until you’ve perfected normality
(and smile; )
Scent beguiles The girl smiles “Stay awhile” And her eyes outshine the moon
(She’s beautiful.)
Nights pass by Chasing fireflies Echoing cries Of the demons fade away
(But forgetting)
Full moon again Bones bend Teeth tear skin To make way for the beast inside
(is all that)
Familiar burning Strange yearning Humanity warning That you shouldn’t go out tonight
(I can do)
Colors fade Moon-made Escape, evade The pull of conscience at your mind
(And stay)
Out of time Out of your mind Prey to find Out of the self-made cage, you’re free
(sane.)
Last chance Creep, advance One glance Is all it takes; she runs
(Is it not)
Blood sprays No one prays Silent gaze Wondering why it has your eyes
(ironic that)
Moon overpowers: Flesh devoured Bones scoured Full of sin and salt, you sleep
(she would be)
Daybreak again Human again Alone again, You awake to the taste of her flesh
(the only one)
No one there No one to care No one to stare As your soul is ripped in two
(to witness)
Mind breaks Body aches Soul quakes As you remember her smile and scream.
(my damnation, and stay?)
(c) Marie | 2004
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Post by leash on Jan 9, 2004 0:20:12 GMT -5
wow.. this is a very interesting format.. i havent seen anything quite like this before. awesome style.. you have such vivid imagery..
thanks for sharing.. enjoyed it much.
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Avatre
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Just around for the words...^.^
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Post by Avatre on Jan 9, 2004 16:15:59 GMT -5
This is pretty cool. I did have to read it over twice for the eh...fractured thoughts within the poem, which I thought was cool. ^_^
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Post by bloodredtears on Jan 9, 2004 16:21:46 GMT -5
very awesome poem...i loved the thoughts within the poem that were broken up...i thought it was a great format...the poem itself was harder to concentrate on because of it being stuck in there like that, but still enjoyable...good job!
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Post by John Barnett on Jan 9, 2004 16:22:40 GMT -5
Very nice piece, I really like this.
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Post by SilverEyes on Jan 21, 2004 0:12:23 GMT -5
The format of this piece adds quite a lot. The images and words of this poem are very powerful and draw a person in very deep.
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