Lost Father

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Lost Father Feb 28, 2004 16:19:40 GMT -5

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Post by Celestial on Feb 28, 2004 16:19:40 GMT -5

I made this one up from the point of view of my RPing character. Enjoy.

How long can I keep this feeling?
It feels so nice.
Warm and safe
I wish to stay with you always

Father... I love you so much...
You've done so much for me...
Hugged me, carried me, cared for me...
But most of all you loved me...

I wanna stay with you forever...
Safe and warm with you
Like right now...
Like this moment...

Can it last forever, Father?
Can you make it do that?
I love you so much...
Please don't let me wake,
Wake from this dream...

Don't make me see the reality
The one where you aren't there...
Don't wake me... Please...

~Lost Father~
~By CAB 2004

Yeah, it's a bomb.
Yes, it's lit.
Yes, you better run for your life.
:: insert evil laughter here ::

sweetest17sin Virtuoso don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile! Posts: 252	Lost Father Feb 28, 2004 21:55:52 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by sweetest17sin on Feb 28, 2004 21:55:52 GMT -5 nice job. its cool you can write poems from a different perspective. mine always have to be about something...my feelings, etc.
	somewhere there's someone who dreams of your smile and finds in your presence that life is worthwhile, so when you are lonely remember it's true; somebody, somewhere is thinking of you!

SilverEyes Poet Laureate Silver eyes crying crimson tears. Posts: 609	Lost Father Feb 29, 2004 1:42:42 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by SilverEyes on Feb 29, 2004 1:42:42 GMT -5 I like the pleading manner of this piece and your diction too. Nice write.
	You know I'm dying to live Until I'm ready I'm ready to die ~Jonny Lang~

rinna(on leave...for eternity) Poet Laureate MIA Quitter surfninja Posts: 610	Lost Father May 6, 2004 1:05:13 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by rinna(on leave...for eternity) on May 6, 2004 1:05:13 GMT -5 this was excellent!!
	'this life, well it's slipping right through my hands...these days turned out nothing like i had planned...'

Post by Celestial on Feb 28, 2004 16:19:40 GMT -5

Post by sweetest17sin on Feb 28, 2004 21:55:52 GMT -5

Post by SilverEyes on Feb 29, 2004 1:42:42 GMT -5

Post by rinna(on leave...for eternity) on May 6, 2004 1:05:13 GMT -5