~Dirty White Dress~

[DarkVortex]

Above the silk and ontop of cotton a sweet breath caresses your cheek.
You grip the sheets as your whole body becomes weak.
The rough feeling of a beard rolls up your leg with a gentle kiss as a gift.
Creating a space above heaven as you feel weightless and begin to lift.

The body is now an instrument to be played but with lips not hands.
For a dream of whispered, lustful taste is what it demands.
You are a dancer locked in a cage waiting to take to the music's flow.
Dancing with romance and your loved one while never letting go.

As you kiss, the game is on until there is no more stars in the night.
For upon every hour your eyes and mine will make an interlocked sight.
You say how you feel for it shows in your voice as you call out my name.
Ever while making love to you, I do exactly the same.

This staggering night shall be one of many as you make your way.
Coming a time where all there exists is my love to make your day.
So remember all that you have vowed and everything you wanted to confess.
Since now is the time to live and throw away your dirty white dress.

[NeverMore]

I am in awe of your works! I write a great deal, yet have never been able to write with such grace and have it rhyme. You will find almost none of my works fall to traditional standards, but yours do and do so with an awsome force. Simply fabulous writing!

[T.J. Barber]

I agree Joe. Great write Nick. You are indeed an awesome writer. I appreciate and respect your works....


Tj

[DarkVortex]

tahnk you guys once again, it means a lot to me. Well, I posted this poem on another forum and the people there critique harshly, and what my poem got was, bad sentence structure and horrible forced rhym. I don't what to say to that, but oh well.. but thanx again... It means a lot....~Nick

[Seth]

The body is now an instrument to be played but with lips not hands.
For a dream of whispered, lustful taste is what it demands.
You are a dancer locked in a cage waiting to take to the music's flow.
Dancing with romance and your loved one while never letting go.

Fantastic write, I love the flow and emotion written here. I agree that it follows so traditionally yet does so in such a wonderful, sensual way. I'm not one for the whole romance-poems but this was written so beautifully and I dare to say perfectly at that.
A romantic masterpiece.

[alostandbrokensoul]

i really liked this it was gripping!