pig
Novice
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Post by pig on Sept 17, 2004 6:51:02 GMT -5
well, hey there you with nothing to say, come down to lay on grass with me, come down to me, to touch my face. i cannot open my eyes today.
oh beloved lover inside my head you know my sin you know my scent i know these wings werent meant for men am i alive? or living? or living dead?
i hear you here you have to stay, to speak the words you havnt said! i try to talk, but without breath the sound is trapped inside my head.
well hey there you with nothing to say, i cannot touch, but as you walk away, i prey that your absence will truely leave me one day, but for now death of love turns the living - dead.
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Post by bloodredtears on Sept 19, 2004 13:04:47 GMT -5
sweet! i really liked this poem...very well written and the message was great to! this one i understood well! great job!
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Post by rinna(on leave...for eternity) on Sept 20, 2004 2:09:22 GMT -5
well done, i like the way you wrote this! spellcheck should make it too. .rk
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Seth
Virtuoso
Root Beer Float
Play something country!
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Post by Seth on Sept 20, 2004 15:47:20 GMT -5
This has such a great flow, love your wording and message too. Wonderful write.
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