NeverMore
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Post by NeverMore on May 25, 2004 0:44:34 GMT -5
when the morning sun is new
when the dew lies fresh on the grass
Time lifts it's gentle veil
Dreams merge slowly to reality
I wake with a blink
sounds of the day
floating round the room
light peeking in the window
first thoughts of waking
turn to a familiar ground
repeating the final thoughts
from when I closed my eyes
each day leads to the next
life fitting in its place
every morning begins
with last nights last thought
All through the day
thought sneaks back to it
recalling the smile I receive
with each and every repeat
The thought of you
day time, night time, all the time
perfection is elusive for life
though with you loving me..... *S*
for now, for ever, for always *S*
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Post by angel on Jun 22, 2004 1:54:32 GMT -5
aaaaaaah, that is sweet. very cute poem...i know guys dont like the word "cute" ...but it is a good thing
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NeverMore
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Post by NeverMore on Jul 7, 2004 22:15:58 GMT -5
Myself, I like the word "cute" it reminds me of the simplicity of the complications of love *S* I am happy you enjoyed this. Thank you
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Post by X x K e l Z x X on Sept 25, 2004 22:31:05 GMT -5
Very enjoyable
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Post by nevadasky on Nov 27, 2004 18:03:14 GMT -5
Hi nevermore, Loved this; simple, pure bliss in love. great write. nevadasky  |
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Post by Alex'z Death Chic on Nov 27, 2004 22:22:40 GMT -5
I agree. nice work.
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Wickedblades666
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I Hate Life, but i am stuck in it by my own rules: death is for quitters, i dont quit...
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Post by Wickedblades666 on Dec 5, 2004 9:10:23 GMT -5
Great peice, very gentle and yet so lovely that i am going to go read it again....
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NeverMore
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Post by NeverMore on Dec 5, 2004 14:45:09 GMT -5
Well, I have to thank you all for your comments on this work. It is my favorite of all I have written in a very long time. Although it is written to someone who simply does not understand it I believe. To me, there are so few true barriers to love. But most people use, age, looks, money and so much else to judge what is right. Me, I use connection and love and nothing else.
And so I have no reason to say all that *L* but I have not worked it in to a poem as yet. One of those "to be written" things.
I do want to mention and I think I speak for many here. Your comments on the works that effect you in any way, are greatly appreciated by everyone. Not only knowing people like what is written or if they have a suggestion, but knowing others can feel the same and making the world a little closer, means so very much to poets. after all, we are the lovers of life, are we not?
Thank you all yet again.
Joe..aka..Nevermore
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