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Apr 19, 2004 12:47:38 GMT -5
Post by BlackRainbow on Apr 19, 2004 12:47:38 GMT -5
Her first love.... She never knew how sweet, how innocent she used to be. Until the boy she yerned for became the flame she couldn't bring to ashes. This boy was different, although he may long for the day she fears, she loved him and would do anything for him. She was always afraid of nudity, but for him she would do it. "Take off your clothes" said Dameon. She paused for a moment, but then slowly opened her blouse exposing her breasts. "Alice...your beutiful" She closed her eyes giving a slite smile. "Come over here..by me" She walked over to the bed and sat down. She was shaking, knowing of what was to become. Her body was telling her to do it..but she didn't feel ready. The kiss was shokingly sweet. His tounge, his lips..bringing her to lay down. He kissed her more, but this time more deeply and passionatly. He lifted her up and put her on top of him. "You have the control now, do to me what you want." She took off his pants, showing his hard manhood. "See what you do to me Alice? This is all yours, all you have to do, is take it." She put her hand around him, closing her eyes, feeling. She knew this was right, it all felt good, it had to be good. When they couldn't stand anymore after the 2nd round, they stopped and looked at eachother. She looked into his eyes, spotting a small tear rolling down his cheek. For the first time, she felt...beutiful.
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Apr 29, 2004 20:01:28 GMT -5
Post by SilverEyes on Apr 29, 2004 20:01:28 GMT -5
Descriptive but still modest. I like the final few lines especially the last sentence. I hope that love doesn't die.
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May 5, 2004 14:00:35 GMT -5
Post by T.J. Barber on May 5, 2004 14:00:35 GMT -5
Great write!
This story was very well written. I also loved the last stanza...it made it complete....keep it up!!
TJ
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May 5, 2004 15:42:03 GMT -5
Post by John Barnett on May 5, 2004 15:42:03 GMT -5
I agree with them both, very good
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