Persuaded (virginity lost )

serenepoetress
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Persuaded (virginity lost ) Jan 28, 2004 15:53:18 GMT -5

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Post by serenepoetress on Jan 28, 2004 15:53:18 GMT -5

Remembering the moment
when their eyes first met
haunts her every thought
and fills her with regret.

Remembering the words
he whispered in the dark,
beguiling words of love,
falsehoods proven stark.

Remembering the strength
known while in his arms.
Caressing in the moonlight,
enamored of his charms.

Remembering the kisses,
exhilaration on her skin.
Decorum felled by passion,
persuaded, she gave in.

Remembering the fury
hastening through her heart.
Sullied by his touch,
now knowing they would part.

Remembering the glint,
satisfaction in his eye.
Buttoning up his shirt
he left without goodbye.

Remembering the shame
coursing through her breast,
the bitter loss of virtue,
becoming his latest conquest.

Remembering the pressure,
the mind games he would play.
Too naïve to preconceive,
he was the hunter, she the prey.

Copyright 2004
Laura Mae Oldham-Brownell

bloodredtears Legend I don't entirely think I've had enough rum to allow that kind of talk. Posts: 1,164	Persuaded (virginity lost ) Jan 28, 2004 20:16:12 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by bloodredtears on Jan 28, 2004 20:16:12 GMT -5 wow this is a very good piece...it describes the thoughts well and the emotions as well..good job!
	Poetry copyright of Bloodredtears Summer has flown its nest, as the days swiftly turn to fall and we start to roost in the bosom of winter.

SilverEyes Poet Laureate Silver eyes crying crimson tears. Posts: 609	Persuaded (virginity lost ) Jan 28, 2004 21:50:51 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by SilverEyes on Jan 28, 2004 21:50:51 GMT -5 Wow, very emotional and definitely hard hitting. I'm sad to think this is happening to someone new all the time.
	You know I'm dying to live Until I'm ready I'm ready to die ~Jonny Lang~

T.J. Barber Administrator Founder I would advise you to stay on my good side!!! Posts: 937	Persuaded (virginity lost ) Jan 29, 2004 1:07:18 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by T.J. Barber on Jan 29, 2004 1:07:18 GMT -5 I to enjoyed this one. The title summary catches peoples eye. It was really good. You seem to have witnessed this yourself. Great Job!
	No man is an island in itself...Therefore, never send for whom the bell tolls. It tolls for the''

Eclipse Apprentice It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time. Posts: 222	Persuaded (virginity lost ) Jan 29, 2004 13:54:55 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Eclipse on Jan 29, 2004 13:54:55 GMT -5 wow...very deep. lovely write.
	You saw what you get If you take what you take. Look in the eyes of the test. It's all because... Now there's a feeling I get. When I look to the left. But we can never be sensed. Our searching for a sign.

John Barnett Founders Founder Posts: 994	Persuaded (virginity lost ) Feb 3, 2004 15:50:02 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by John Barnett on Feb 3, 2004 15:50:02 GMT -5 Yes I agree with the others, this is an awesome write. Very well done.
	Jwalaeb

Sathien Guest	Persuaded (virginity lost ) Feb 5, 2004 9:52:01 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Back to Top Post by Sathien on Feb 5, 2004 9:52:01 GMT -5 drew me in. very naturally written. good job!

sweetest17sin Virtuoso don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile! Posts: 252	Persuaded (virginity lost ) Feb 15, 2004 20:32:59 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by sweetest17sin on Feb 15, 2004 20:32:59 GMT -5 hey...first of all...if this is a poem written because of an experience, i am really sorry. i hope you don't view yourself as any less of a person. secondly...really nice job writing this poem.
	somewhere there's someone who dreams of your smile and finds in your presence that life is worthwhile, so when you are lonely remember it's true; somebody, somewhere is thinking of you!

amberputis Virtuoso ~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~ Posts: 330	Persuaded (virginity lost ) Feb 16, 2004 13:56:26 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by amberputis on Feb 16, 2004 13:56:26 GMT -5 This was verrrry impressive. Every lone fit so perfectly, incredible.
	Amber

imaginary goddess #5 Novice shape me into something I never will be, and you'll find out this facade was an escape from reality. Posts: 69	Persuaded (virginity lost ) Feb 17, 2004 17:47:50 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by imaginary goddess #5 on Feb 17, 2004 17:47:50 GMT -5 even though this was a bittersweet poem, you could almost feel the emotions coursing through her. A truly lovely, however sad, write. beautiful job love. - Lianna
	- Lianna Last one left of our lineage - don't forget us. imaginary goddesses. "shallowed up in the sound of my screaming cannot cease for the fear of silent nights oh how i long for the deep sleep dreaming the goddess of imaginary light..." - Evanescence

JosephScottMorris Apprentice Posts: 157	Persuaded (virginity lost ) Feb 23, 2004 2:22:57 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by JosephScottMorris on Feb 23, 2004 2:22:57 GMT -5 A beautiful poem,Thanks for sharing it! :)Joe

Persuaded (virginity lost )

Post by serenepoetress on Jan 28, 2004 15:53:18 GMT -5

Post by bloodredtears on Jan 28, 2004 20:16:12 GMT -5

Post by SilverEyes on Jan 28, 2004 21:50:51 GMT -5

Post by T.J. Barber on Jan 29, 2004 1:07:18 GMT -5

Post by Eclipse on Jan 29, 2004 13:54:55 GMT -5

Post by John Barnett on Feb 3, 2004 15:50:02 GMT -5

Post by Sathien on Feb 5, 2004 9:52:01 GMT -5

Post by sweetest17sin on Feb 15, 2004 20:32:59 GMT -5

Post by amberputis on Feb 16, 2004 13:56:26 GMT -5

Post by imaginary goddess #5 on Feb 17, 2004 17:47:50 GMT -5

Post by JosephScottMorris on Feb 23, 2004 2:22:57 GMT -5