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In Vain
Nov 30, 2004 17:41:17 GMT -5
Post by beginswithKendsinG on Nov 30, 2004 17:41:17 GMT -5
Archaic, the blend is weak Ecstatic, no pain this week Each day it gets harder To make my way Through all my hate
I can laugh at every time I've cut myself I can smile at the drugs and all my filth Luckily sex was always free Hopefully some one will kill me
Bloodline, the tie is weak Realize, these tears are oh so weak Undermine your authority To make my path sufficiently visible
I look back and I can see You laughing at me I look back and I can see A million fingers pointing
I can laugh at every time I've cut myself I can smile at the drugs and all my filth Luckily sex was always free Hopefully some one will kill me
I don't know what it means to bleed I ran dry so long ago I don't know what it means to be free I am enslaved to this world
I feel my last wing, tear from me I see my ending, raped from me I see the fallen, pray for me And watch as I fade away in vain I fade in vain
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Mwalvbk
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I came from the fire, now I'm here to burn
Posts: 111
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In Vain
Dec 3, 2004 15:30:32 GMT -5
Post by Mwalvbk on Dec 3, 2004 15:30:32 GMT -5
I like this a lot, the wording and the power behind it are both execellent. Great work.
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In Vain
Dec 5, 2004 21:26:01 GMT -5
Post by beginswithKendsinG on Dec 5, 2004 21:26:01 GMT -5
The wording gets kinda weak there after awhile. You didn't key on the 3rd stanza? other then that is sort of generalized. Not specific enough.
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