Untitled-for the time being

[amberputis]

I took a drink it was my first taste
They aren't the ones to judge in the first place
It was amazing how good we started off
Until we got stuck and f***** things up
Now we're hardly even speaking
and my heart will not stop aching
I lie in bed, thinking of you
alone to decide what next I'll do
so I inhale deeply
then exhale softly
my mind has traveled so far, I don't know where
I don't like to lie, so I admitt I'm scared
Can we start over please?
Rewind to the very first scene
I'd take back half the things I've said and done
Life would be better, be much more fun
I wish we'd both say sorry
then we wouldn't have to worry
But I guess life doesn't hold what I want
so I take his s*** and pack it all away
then I inhale deeply
exhale softly
now my heart is in a shot glass
so I stir it up, and drink it fast
I took a drink it was my last taste
Maybe they were right in the first place
But still, I can't help but wonder how your feeling
Are you still broken, or are you healing?
I've never been so hurt...
I wanna run away forever
I'm still in bed thinking of you
When will I wake to find this untrue?

[sweetest17sin]

nice job on this one. i followed it perfectly. i loved the last four lines!

melissa!

[SilverEyes]

Cool lyrics, I especially like the part about drinking your heart from a shot glass.

[bloodredtears]

wonderful piece here...i also enjoyed the heart in a shot-glass part...great job!

[richie]

almost missed this amberputis, make a great song
perfect metrical rhyme, I liked it very much.
regards Richie.

[Mikepoet]

This was good stuff...I cannot write these long poems like this it is hard for me to keep it flowing as well..

[X x K e l Z x X]

This is a great song, I really liked this Amber.