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Post by culupa on Mar 30, 2005 15:03:51 GMT -5
Your eyes are like ice.
Your eyes take me away.
Your eyes all ways brighten my day.
Your eyes are the world to me.
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Post by T.J. Barber on Apr 2, 2005 14:53:13 GMT -5
Nice Brian.....well done...I didn't figure you to be much of a poetry man but, you seem to do alright. Welcome to PC, make yourself at home..
Tj
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Post by _black phoenix_ on Apr 6, 2005 15:23:36 GMT -5
this definitely has potential. there are a couple little mistakes in there..
"Your eye take me away." -- "eyes"
Your eyes all ways bright my day. -- "always brighten my day"?
Your eyes our the world to me. -- "are"
nicely done. i like the vibe of this piece.
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Post by X x K e l Z x X on Jul 27, 2005 21:09:41 GMT -5
Gr8 write!
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