NeverMore
Virtuoso
Beethoven Looking f*g
Posts: 454
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2 am
May 23, 2004 1:34:30 GMT -5
Post by NeverMore on May 23, 2004 1:34:30 GMT -5
the lights are all down low
the candle begins to flicker
the music stopped long ago
the customers have all gone home
time to close the door once more
walk the quiet streets to home
another night begins it's pleasure
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2 am
May 29, 2004 7:58:41 GMT -5
Post by Persephone on May 29, 2004 7:58:41 GMT -5
I think you have to use the possessive its this time.
Nice descriptions. Very classical.
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2 am
Jun 22, 2004 2:26:23 GMT -5
Post by angel on Jun 22, 2004 2:26:23 GMT -5
I am lost on this one. Translation?
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NeverMore
Virtuoso
Beethoven Looking f*g
Posts: 454
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2 am
Jul 10, 2004 11:30:45 GMT -5
Post by NeverMore on Jul 10, 2004 11:30:45 GMT -5
Angel, I do not know if you work or not, but this one is based around a service industry job, more a nightclub then anything else from a managers point of view. All the fun of the night has ended, the staff and guests have all left and the person is alone about to lock up. When I wrote it, I was going home to no one through a very quiet big city. I hope that helps *S*
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Mwalvbk
Apprentice
I came from the fire, now I'm here to burn
Posts: 111
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2 am
Dec 3, 2004 13:01:28 GMT -5
Post by Mwalvbk on Dec 3, 2004 13:01:28 GMT -5
This very descriptive and well written.
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