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May 1, 2004 15:03:18 GMT -5
Post by KG on May 1, 2004 15:03:18 GMT -5
I can't stand your face...
I see mine in your eyes
How can we bleed
Lie so peacfully
Life can't take this turn,
How are skin will burn
Why cant we take or own lives?
Why cant we take there lies?
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Hunter
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Fallen Angel
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May 2, 2004 3:37:08 GMT -5
Post by Hunter on May 2, 2004 3:37:08 GMT -5
I like this a lot.
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May 3, 2004 16:50:05 GMT -5
Post by KG on May 3, 2004 16:50:05 GMT -5
*bows*
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May 3, 2004 17:14:33 GMT -5
Post by Mikepoet on May 3, 2004 17:14:33 GMT -5
The poet KG. A good rhyme sir, it's depth is painful to read.
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May 5, 2004 8:31:42 GMT -5
Post by KG on May 5, 2004 8:31:42 GMT -5
Alas, for it's the very things that pain us that birth our inspiration.
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May 5, 2004 8:39:39 GMT -5
Post by bloodredtears on May 5, 2004 8:39:39 GMT -5
i like this...very interesting indeed.. unfortunately i've thought that upon occasion...it would just be so much easier huh?
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May 5, 2004 16:16:12 GMT -5
Post by KG on May 5, 2004 16:16:12 GMT -5
lol, I don't see anything wrong with suicide. If you want to kill yourself go for it. THen you don't have taxes, bills, job, responsabilities. lol, I fail to see the down-side. ;D
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May 18, 2004 22:06:56 GMT -5
Post by SilverEyes on May 18, 2004 22:06:56 GMT -5
I noticed one slight error in the last stanza. The are should be our in the second line. Other than that, I like this a lot. I especially like the first stanza.
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