Hunter
Virtuoso
Fallen Angel
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Apr 3, 2004 5:59:45 GMT -5
Post by Hunter on Apr 3, 2004 5:59:45 GMT -5
Stars
I often wonder if you are watching the same stars as I while you hold her in your arms
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Eclipse
Apprentice
It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time.
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Apr 3, 2004 8:59:42 GMT -5
Post by Eclipse on Apr 3, 2004 8:59:42 GMT -5
i liked it, but i think you could elaborate on it a little.
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Hunter
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Apr 3, 2004 9:04:17 GMT -5
Post by Hunter on Apr 3, 2004 9:04:17 GMT -5
Thank you. Elaborate? I was long-winded.
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Apr 3, 2004 11:57:10 GMT -5
Post by bloodredtears on Apr 3, 2004 11:57:10 GMT -5
i think this was a perfect piece...seeing as it's a short poem you conveyed what you wanted to say very well...great job!
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Hunter
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Fallen Angel
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Apr 3, 2004 12:46:33 GMT -5
Post by Hunter on Apr 3, 2004 12:46:33 GMT -5
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Apr 4, 2004 0:59:35 GMT -5
Post by SilverEyes on Apr 4, 2004 0:59:35 GMT -5
I like the brevity and the almost universal action of looking up at the stars and wondering if that special someone is looking up too.
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Hunter
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Apr 5, 2004 6:04:46 GMT -5
Post by Hunter on Apr 5, 2004 6:04:46 GMT -5
Thank you.
Most of my poems are only a few lines long, I like to see how much I can convey with as few words as possible.
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Apr 5, 2004 8:20:25 GMT -5
Post by Mikepoet on Apr 5, 2004 8:20:25 GMT -5
:'(Heart break sucks.
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Hunter
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Apr 5, 2004 8:25:46 GMT -5
Post by Hunter on Apr 5, 2004 8:25:46 GMT -5
Thankfully, Mike sweetie, this is set awhile ago. After a few months of severe self-medication, I think I'm all mended up.
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