Eclipse
Apprentice
It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time.
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Post by Eclipse on Feb 26, 2004 12:56:26 GMT -5
Drift Away
The little girl; how sweet she smiled, flashing her pearly whites. She danced in Spring’s dewy grass; watched the lily float down the creek. Sun catches petals, in its essence, twinkl’ng in the light. The water is so crisp, cool; reflecting the rising moon. The sun bled crimson from its wound, and then, all was forgotten. And the little girl doesn’t smile anymore...
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Post by SilverEyes on Feb 26, 2004 19:09:00 GMT -5
Quite an abrupt change of pace. Nice descriptions and an interesting twist.
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Eclipse
Apprentice
It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time.
Posts: 222
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Post by Eclipse on Feb 27, 2004 11:25:24 GMT -5
yes, it's supposed to be like that. thank you for the reply.
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Post by bloodredtears on Feb 27, 2004 19:31:09 GMT -5
i like the abruptness of this piece...reminds you that bad things can happen at any moment even if you were just really happy
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Post by John Barnett on Mar 11, 2004 15:47:52 GMT -5
I love this, outstanding!
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