amberputis
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~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~
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Post by amberputis on Feb 22, 2004 14:16:03 GMT -5
*I guess this could fit into a number of categories, but I'll just make things a little easier *
A cold enough breeze can slice us as if a blade is cutting our skin. A dark enough cloud can block views as if our sky wasn't meant to show beauty. A bright enough sun can burn our bodies as if a flame is dancing across our pores. A damp enough ground can cause weeds to grow as if our flowers need company. A dry enough inhale can make us weary as if water seizes to exist. But a warm enough smile can forlongingly exceed happiness as if there is no tomorrow
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Post by SilverEyes on Feb 22, 2004 20:26:35 GMT -5
I love this. It has a wonderful descriptions. Beside from the last line my favorite line is: "A bright enough sun can burn our bodies as if a flame is dancing across our pores." ;D
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Post by bloodredtears on Feb 22, 2004 22:18:32 GMT -5
very good piece...i really liked the last line also...very good imagery...great job!
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Post by JosephScottMorris on Feb 23, 2004 0:44:17 GMT -5
Amber, I enjoyed reading this poem, I like ever line,Thank you for sharing it! ;DJoe
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Post by John Barnett on Feb 24, 2004 14:46:39 GMT -5
This was very nice.
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Post by richie on Feb 25, 2004 13:56:11 GMT -5
Amberputis, this is great work you have set a sense of place-imagery from the start, grammer holds up well content full and intriguing profound very good. regards Richie.
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amberputis
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~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~
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Post by amberputis on Feb 26, 2004 0:28:43 GMT -5
thanks so much, im glad this was enjoyed...thanks richie!
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