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Post by John Barnett on Mar 9, 2004 15:11:34 GMT -5
A silhouette of the truth hides your lies
As a shadow of guilt is left lurking behind
Never ask me why I do not trust you
Because you've never given me a reason to
Dishonesty is the worst policy you know
Yet you continue with your cheap blows
Trying to survive in your deep sea of sin
But we all know that losers never win
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Eclipse
Apprentice
It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time.
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Post by Eclipse on Mar 9, 2004 18:50:09 GMT -5
oo i like it. reminds me of a fight that i'm currently having with my friends....i liked the rhyme and how it flowed. lovely piece.
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Post by bloodredtears on Mar 15, 2004 16:17:42 GMT -5
"Dishonesty is the worst policy you know Yet you continue with your cheap blows" those two lines are very awesome...for some reason my tag buttons aren't working...this piece as a whole is wonderful John. I also liked the last line...  great job! |
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Post by X x K e l Z x X on Mar 18, 2004 14:00:11 GMT -5
Great write John, so true, things like this are tough, I know.
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Post by leash on Mar 21, 2004 18:07:48 GMT -5
well done. i think that this is one of your better pieces. natural flow.
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Post by DarkEagle on Mar 24, 2004 20:38:31 GMT -5
Never ask me why I do not trust you
Because you've never given me a reason to
An amazing write i can relate to this very well though both sides have different opinions of whose blows are cheap |
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Post by SilverEyes on Mar 31, 2004 0:25:51 GMT -5
I especially like the last two lines. They really bring the piece together.
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Post by ::..::FoX::..:: on Apr 1, 2004 14:20:46 GMT -5
Yea, this was good
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Hunter
Virtuoso
Fallen Angel
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Post by Hunter on Apr 23, 2004 22:27:02 GMT -5
Very good.
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great job!
