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Post by leash on Jan 13, 2004 15:52:21 GMT -5
i want to harbor a ship
i want to give birth to a whale
there is a sailor whistling within my womb.
* this should probably be in the short poetic gems area.. could you please move it? thanks.
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Post by bloodredtears on Jan 13, 2004 17:39:32 GMT -5
interesting...where did you get the inspiration for this?? its quite odd and yet very good...  i really like it alot! |
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Post by leash on Jan 13, 2004 18:00:42 GMT -5
well.. i was just sitting there and all of a sudden i had a vision of one of those ships in a bottle and the first line popped into my head. the rest of it just sort of fell into place.
yeah.. im weird.
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Post by bloodredtears on Jan 14, 2004 16:56:36 GMT -5
very interesting...it's weird in a very good way! very creative and original!
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Post by SilverEyes on Jan 14, 2004 18:38:52 GMT -5
Interesting and strangely inspirational.
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Chaotic_Thetis
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Bleed me! For i have witnessed yet remained silent.Slay me! For i had your love and kept it.
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Post by Chaotic_Thetis on Jan 27, 2004 14:13:07 GMT -5
Indeed, i have one of those ships in a bottle. Interesting use of imagery here, especially giving birth to a whale, it certainly makes one think of the connotations. Lovely write ^_^
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Post by richie on Feb 3, 2004 8:20:24 GMT -5
I think this excellent again, I dont use caps or pun-in short eight-twelve word poems but its a personal thing I would use a cap "I" though to start a poem
very good work.
regards richie.
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i really like it alot!