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Slap Me
Apr 3, 2005 19:36:43 GMT -5
Post by CherryCoker on Apr 3, 2005 19:36:43 GMT -5
One ugly net, burned out with shades of repetition, strangles out the hues of brutal suffocation. And the bruises which criss-cross this heart, painted in swirling whispers of faux-happiness, are visible only to the fellow tormented eye in the creased pages of shaken youth.
And when you look across this face, you drown in a swift current of defense mechanisms-- walls and traps and the deepest of falsity. But what you never saw were all of my dreams-- undervalued, overlooked, depreciated-- amidst the cries crushed by mistrusted intuition.
And sitting here, trapped in my own fear of failure, falling into my own self-confidence run dry, I can't help but wish I'd dreamt up lighter days and brighter hearts to crush themselves. But instead I had ideals-- and moral fiber soaked my soul in possibility and hope.
Won't somebody slap me out of reality? [/color][/size][/center]
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Slap Me
Apr 3, 2005 21:18:05 GMT -5
Post by T.J. Barber on Apr 3, 2005 21:18:05 GMT -5
WOW!!!
Deeply intense and moving. I truly enjoyed this piece. It's emotion and rhythym flowed with such power and pain. I really loved it!
TJ
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Slap Me
Apr 4, 2005 15:03:08 GMT -5
Post by CherryCoker on Apr 4, 2005 15:03:08 GMT -5
Thank you!
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Slap Me
Apr 11, 2005 4:42:53 GMT -5
Post by Alex'z Death Chic on Apr 11, 2005 4:42:53 GMT -5
wonderful write! ;D
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