everyone has a price to pay

[Broken hope]

a face so easy to hide
every feeling held inside

in the end more lost then before
feeling inside, can't take anymore

i know the end comes far too soon
i don't want to die if you never knew

everything was for the pain that i felt
every day i lived for the pain that i felt

first love they say you never get over
well i did but it was this edge that i'm over

falling faster and further without a hand to grab
missing the once vibrant spirit at one time i had

feeling so helpless, so lost, so dead now.
ending a life is easy but how,

Many people will be hurt inside
Will any friends truly cry?

cause im falling faster and further every day
and i too have my price to pay

walked away from a feeling that i have so deep
that every now and then i feel i must weap

but now i have married another lovely soul
and the person i was, is buried in the hole.

The one I built so willingly to run away.
When everyone who loved me, didn't ask the me to stay.


it's good to be writing again

[pipes]

sounded good, but with a few flow problems, i think you should keep the rythym more consistant but thats just preference, and anotehr personal thing is that i didn't really like the couplets ending in the same word sometimes, just didn't sound good in my head. aside from the technicality of the peice, very emotional and a great poem in that respect, good job.


pipes

[Seth]

Fantastic piece. I love the first two couplets the most, perhaps because they open the peice up so nicely. Flow deters once in a while, I agree, but all in all, this holds such emotion and depth.
Terrific write.

[alostandbrokensoul]

wonderful as always glad to read your poems again

The one I built so willingly to run away.
When everyone who loved me, didn't ask the me to stay

these are my favorites!!
Suicidally yours~Alostandbrokensoul~

[chris]

I really felt that one. This is very good. It had alot of depth in the words.