the day

[Broken hope]

Expecting nothing to last
When she said she love him so fast

He knew how much you meant it though
He felt the same way but didn't let it show

He is drinking more every day
Writing down everything he wants to say

Too bad nothing seems to help me now
He's wanting to cry but has forgotten how

Will she come back for him tonight
They need to end this every day fight

Its hurting him so much inside
Cowards way out ihe wishes to die

he know all too well the sting of a blade
Where words were spoken and there's nothing left to say

He's turned best friends into strangers
They just wanted to keep him out of danger

Heartbreak is what he seems to feel
While being fake is the easiest way to deal

Changing day by day so no one can see
That he's crying inside and he needs

You to need him just a little bit
But you dont and he knows this is all he gets

Routine replaces the way he felt back in those days
Where he had so many things he wanted to say

Knowledge replaces love and took away all his innocence
When he looks in the mirror he knows he hasn't been the same since

The day she said "i love you, i need you, but were through"
The day he said "i love you, i need you, i want to be with you"

[Seth]

There are parts of this where the flow gets choppy, some lines are too long

BUT, this is totally real and awesome. The feel and pain in this is something a lot of people can relate to.
The 7th stanza really gets to me, it really rings true.

I also love how stanzas 10 and 11 flow blend together-that is nicely written.

My favorites though, as hard as it is to choose, would be the two ending stanzas. Totally amazing write.
Very profound and deeply relative to the heart.

[X x K e l Z x X]

This is excellent