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Post by A2sHaTo on Nov 30, 2004 20:29:55 GMT -5
So delicate and willing,
the life of this girl.
Her palms are sweating,
her mind in a whirl.
The lights dimmed low,
the sheets wrapped tight.
Why is she even here
tonight?
The flames do flicker,
in his heart of lust.
Her life's on hold,
her empty trust.
She wanted to make him happy,
to gain a new friend.
What did she expect,
with sex being the trend?
The curtains pulled apart,
moon light streaming in.
She can't help but question,
is she committing a sin?
When he's done and asleep,
she's still beside him, watching for the sun.
She lies still as she thinks,
"What have I done..?"
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Post by Seth on Nov 30, 2004 20:43:25 GMT -5
Unfortunately this speaks the truth in volumes.
This IS life for most girls,
heck even some guys give it up just to look good and look like a 'man'...
It's a messed up world we live in,
but yeah, what else is new?
Love your poem, the emotion and realism is definately felt and seen. I know a lot of girls who can relate to this.
Wonderfully written, it speaks but only the truth.
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Post by beginswithKendsinG on Dec 1, 2004 3:45:56 GMT -5
The only reason it seems bad is because of what you are taught. Make your own decisions and liberate yourself.
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Post by A2sHaTo on Dec 1, 2004 7:24:48 GMT -5
Unfortunately this speaks the truth in volumes. This IS life for most girls, heck even some guys give it up just to look good and look like a 'man'... It's a messed up world we live in, but yeah, what else is new? Love your poem, the emotion and realism is definately felt and seen. I know a lot of girls who can relate to this. Wonderfully written, it speaks but only the truth. Thank you for your comment, it was greatly appreciated!!  ! |
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Post by A2sHaTo on Dec 1, 2004 7:26:55 GMT -5
The only reason it seems bad is because of what you are taught. Make your own decisions and liberate yourself. True.. But, what's the point of poetry, if you cannot express yourself, and/or help someone else realize that others understand, and care? I agree with what you said, yes, but I don't really understand it fully.. Because, well, I don't know. You'd have to go through sometime like that to be able to understand it. |
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Post by X x K e l Z x X on Dec 2, 2004 7:03:49 GMT -5
All true, very good piece, I really like your stuff, welcome to Poet Club.
Kelly
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Post by A2sHaTo on Dec 2, 2004 19:47:48 GMT -5
All true, very good piece, I really like your stuff, welcome to Poet Club. Kelly Thank you! |
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Post by Alex'z Death Chic on Dec 2, 2004 20:47:45 GMT -5
She wanted to make him happy, to gain a new friend. What did she expect, with sex being the trend? bah... sex is overrated... I agree with what kg said... yet not fully since I dun know you. it was a great write all in all... nice flow and i loved the title. |
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Post by beginswithKendsinG on Dec 5, 2004 3:54:02 GMT -5
I have been there. I do understand what you gus are talking about. What I am saying is tha tyou feel dirty and tha tit is wrong because of the way you where raised. Don't assume I haven't been there because you don't understand the comment. Just ask me questions. Ask me to share my experiences. I will talk I have no problem doing so. We can all benefit from eachother.
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Post by Seth on Dec 30, 2004 23:28:11 GMT -5
Hm, that's true... But sometimes you don't feel
dirty until you find out the other one
was deceiving you and just used you...
Well, after they F*** you, and toss you aside,
no matter how you were raised,
you still feel pretty low, like dirt.
Especially, if you actually felt something for them...
--I've never been in that predicament,
but my friends and family have.
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Post by A2sHaTo on Jan 1, 2005 0:45:05 GMT -5
I have been there. I do understand what you gus are talking about. What I am saying is tha tyou feel dirty and tha tit is wrong because of the way you where raised. Don't assume I haven't been there because you don't understand the comment. Just ask me questions. Ask me to share my experiences. I will talk I have no problem doing so. We can all benefit from eachother. If you'd like to share, I'd be willing to listen. I never said I wasn't, and it'd be a good experience for us all. I'm open. |
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Post by cherryXchapstick on Jan 2, 2005 13:16:54 GMT -5
this one hit me. i was that girl once. not all that long ago. and its like the whole time you cant focus on feelings, if you care for the person enough. if you actually want it. all you can think about is the movements. the motions. the tounge thats down your throat. and it feels more like your watching it happen. then actually participating. and when its over. you realize you never thought to press pause. and stop it. because you were vulnerable. and now you're even more vulnerable.
this was a good poem. i liked it. it was very nicely done.
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Post by NeverMore on Jan 2, 2005 16:33:16 GMT -5
First I want to say I enjoyed this work. It is nice sometimes for us guys to know girls get the same thoughts. Being torn between what we were taught as we aged and what we feel inside ourselves is right. very awsome write.
I am a much older guy then most on these boards, though not the oldest person. I grew up in a time very confused about the issue of if sex was love or a sin when not married, or something that should be a one person one life thing. Although at the time my generation thought one way, almost all changed thier views as they aged, they became parents and unwilling to alow thier children the right to thier own choices.
Me, I believe sex is a natural and very important way of sharing one's self. Sometimes it is sheer lust between two people and the drive takes over. I see nothing wrong with that if a person is happy with themselves. Sometimes it is an act of compassion for someone who desperatly needs more then a hug to prove they are alive.
These days, one does have to take care mind you, because there are things that can kill out there. But my best thought on the whole topic is, be yourself, leave the masks behind and show your true colors. Love and sex do go together, but love is not sex and sex is not love.
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Post by beginswithKendsinG on Jan 4, 2005 2:33:22 GMT -5
Well aid Nevermore... I think you say the things the way I want them to sound. I can write about my feelings and my views but expressing through conversation I don't think I am so good at.
Seth you are right about feeling used...unless you are honest with yourself about why you are there in the first place. Was it realy because you loved him/her or is that the light you see sex in? Something that only lovers do. The girls (and guys) I have been with lie to themselves or confuse their feelings for eachother. Thinking that they must be in love because they want to have sex. But you are right being used feels bad. Unless you are doing the using. Wich happens more often then not.
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Post by beginswithKendsinG on Jan 4, 2005 2:33:43 GMT -5
In my experience anyway.
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