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Post by bloodredtears on Sept 11, 2004 9:44:50 GMT -5
ooooohhh....i really really like this piece...its quite wonderful! i especially love the last stanza and the last two lines of the 4th stanza. great job, definitely a great piece to end writers block with ;D
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Post by Seth on Sept 20, 2004 11:17:34 GMT -5
Beautiful in it's own way. The wording and flow was wonderful... the last and second stanza were my favorites.
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Post by Alex'z Death Chic on Sept 24, 2004 22:13:03 GMT -5
umm.... guys... where's my poem???
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Post by Seth on Sept 28, 2004 12:54:32 GMT -5
::Blinks Confused:: ...That's what I want to know...  |
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Post by Alex'z Death Chic on Oct 9, 2004 6:19:43 GMT -5
I've taken every blow with my head held up high
cried tears of crimson with a smile on my face
yet admist the resplendent facade
I hide my face in disgrace
For deceit has won me over
together with sin they await for guilt to set in
for lying to the eyes that fall upon me
I am forced to die within
They've built a wall to keep the truth inside
tied my hands in ropes and thorns
masking my pain with every lie I tell
convering the blood my anguish adorns
Yet I do not care for physical wounds
they heal in time, they play no significant role
what I abhor are the wounds that emotions bring
for they slice deeper, they slice right through my soul
Funny to think that I no longer long for escape
somehow I've grown accustomed to the nothingness
ironic that all I wanted was to stop living in the grey
and start living in black and white yet I only got darkness
I've become one of the apathetic, maybe
somehow I've managed to empty my head
for what care should I have
now that my heart is dead?
since it was missing... thought I'd repost it again...
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Post by Seth on Nov 9, 2004 13:15:04 GMT -5
Beautiful wording, as said before...
Lovely write, it really evokes such emotion...
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Post by nevadasky on Nov 27, 2004 18:19:45 GMT -5
WOW, deep imagery and passion. great write.
nevadasky
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