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Trapped
Aug 1, 2004 20:35:55 GMT -5
Post by alostandbrokensoul on Aug 1, 2004 20:35:55 GMT -5
We're all trapped trapped in the sanctity of our minds where fantasy mixes with reality. A place of endless existence a place of endless emotion.
We're all trapped trapped in seductive dreams that pull us t oa place of fantasy where reality doesnt exist and fantasy rules all.
We're all trapped trapped in nightmares nightmares that drag us through endless tunnels of terror that wake us up in a cold sweat leaving us with only the echos from our screaming.
We're all trapped trapped in this world where humanity is a disease where wars rage on between everyone and everything where everything lives to die.
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Trapped
Aug 3, 2004 22:09:43 GMT -5
Post by angel on Aug 3, 2004 22:09:43 GMT -5
beautiful...absolutely beautiful. This poem is very strong from beginning to end and makes you look in WHOLE new perspective. This is incredible. Very nice job. I love this piece a lot and will re-read it a few times in my days. Muy caliente!
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Trapped
Aug 27, 2004 22:57:09 GMT -5
Post by bloodredtears on Aug 27, 2004 22:57:09 GMT -5
amazing work here...the last stanza was my favorite by far, because it summarizes what you had already said and laid the blame where it lies...on the world we live in...great job!
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Seth
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Trapped
Sept 20, 2004 15:39:41 GMT -5
Post by Seth on Sept 20, 2004 15:39:41 GMT -5
Love the second stanza, but as bloodredtears pointed out the last stanza really pulled everything together and set the truth straight. Lovely written, conveys the truth perfectly.
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