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deluded Jun 22, 2004 3:29:19 GMT -5

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Post by rinna(on leave...for eternity) on Jun 22, 2004 3:29:19 GMT -5

with eyes closed firmly
I knew the time had come
the moment your hand left my cheek
first winter’s flake fell
the kiss of renewed strength

I kept it all inside.

this meaningless existence
this halcyon daze
a smokescreen swarmed black
to the dissidence around me
unnoticed, you returned
sweeping around my peripheral
whispered into me a new death

'this life, well it's slipping right through my hands...these days turned out nothing like i had planned...'

angel Guest	deluded Jun 22, 2004 14:00:57 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Back to Top Post by angel on Jun 22, 2004 14:00:57 GMT -5 this is very interesting, very unique

rinna(on leave...for eternity) Poet Laureate MIA Quitter surfninja Posts: 610	deluded Jun 22, 2004 17:55:23 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by rinna(on leave...for eternity) on Jun 22, 2004 17:55:23 GMT -5 invisible, i'll take that as a compliment x rinna x
	'this life, well it's slipping right through my hands...these days turned out nothing like i had planned...'

_black phoenix_ Apprentice .:burning butterfly:. Posts: 76	deluded Jul 21, 2004 4:01:00 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by _black phoenix_ on Jul 21, 2004 4:01:00 GMT -5 I really liked that last stanza.. It was loaded with excellent diction and intriguing ideas. Keep up the awesome work, charl1.
	[glow=silver,4,500]"You can't kill me / cause im already inside you" - Slipknot[/glow]

rinna(on leave...for eternity) Poet Laureate MIA Quitter surfninja Posts: 610	deluded Jul 21, 2004 5:07:18 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by rinna(on leave...for eternity) on Jul 21, 2004 5:07:18 GMT -5 ahh morgan, welcome to poetclub! oh, and thank you very much...i like it the last stanza a bit too. x r x
	'this life, well it's slipping right through my hands...these days turned out nothing like i had planned...'

_black phoenix_ Apprentice .:burning butterfly:. Posts: 76	deluded Jul 21, 2004 12:26:43 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by _black phoenix_ on Jul 21, 2004 12:26:43 GMT -5 Thank you for the welcome. I was wondering how long it would take before a moderator or administrator would drop by the site.. Is everyone on vacation or something?
	Last Edit: Jul 21, 2004 12:27:52 GMT -5 by _black phoenix_ [glow=silver,4,500]"You can't kill me / cause im already inside you" - Slipknot[/glow]

Post by rinna(on leave...for eternity) on Jun 22, 2004 3:29:19 GMT -5

Post by angel on Jun 22, 2004 14:00:57 GMT -5

Post by rinna(on leave...for eternity) on Jun 22, 2004 17:55:23 GMT -5

Post by _black phoenix_ on Jul 21, 2004 4:01:00 GMT -5

Post by rinna(on leave...for eternity) on Jul 21, 2004 5:07:18 GMT -5

Post by _black phoenix_ on Jul 21, 2004 12:26:43 GMT -5