Until I die

[NeverMore]

will you be by my side
when I leave this hard world
will you carry my torch
for as long as all time

will you tell our children stories
pack their lunches sending them to school
may I hold your hands when you cry
for a loved ones final voyage

will you love me alone from now on
may I be the only ones to caress you lips
and show you the depths of my love
in many thousands of ways

my heart is forever yours
it shall never be shared again
for there is only one key
and you wear it around your heart

Now my dearest keeper of my heart
will you once again promise me your hand
leaving all others in the past
so I can love you as I wish?

[T.J. Barber]

Since I am getting married in a couple of months, I found this poem very interesting. I can feel the real heartache from this piece. It's rythym and imagery gripped my heart and held me in suspence. I loved it Joe. It made my heart quiver. It read to me almost like a beautiful song you might hear during a romantic movie. Good job my friend, Tj

[Hunter]

Damn good...

[Mikepoet]

This was quite sweet.

[NeverMore]

I do thank you for your comments, I am thinking that this one really proves to me what I think about a poem is what the reader finds it to be. I placed it in this section to sort of say that it was a very painful work. Sort of like a child crying out to hold on to what has been torn away from them. And it was read as sweet and loving. I do not know if you will understand this, but the fact that people can take my words and have them feel what they have inside, is likely the very best compliment I have ever recieved on my writings.

[Mikepoet]

I understood what you said and feel that you are a kind and loving person after reading your work. Perhaps to you a thing would seem bad but to someone less Classic romantic could see it as another thing entirely.