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Post by amelie on Jan 24, 2004 23:12:02 GMT -5
The bed is an ocean wide, And I sink way too far in. There too many cups, and pots And pans look fat and unfulfilled. The dishwasher takes days to load And my bills are undersized. I jump at the sounds of night And I keep a light on the stair.
I hear the echo when I laugh, And the silence of assent When I rant at the news. Nobody notices my period, Or challenges me because I choose to be disagreeable. I buy only sensible underwear And still keep a light on the stair.
I talk to furniture and believe it cares, Although the mirror has said It is bored with staring at me. I look forward to Mondays, And listen all evening to songs For a chat and some advice. I shower instead of bathe And need that light on the stair.
I cannot sweep your worst jokes From my mind and cry like a child When your junk mail still arrives. There are places I do not go, Knowing the memories it would evoke. I think I am losing the capacity To speak in complete sentences, And I can’t turn that light off the stair.
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Post by SilverEyes on Jan 25, 2004 2:07:18 GMT -5
Beautiful and strongly filled with emotion. Great write.
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Post by Sathien on Jan 25, 2004 7:45:10 GMT -5
*agrees* i can picture the scenario very well. great job! keep up!
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Post by bloodredtears on Jan 25, 2004 13:54:22 GMT -5
this is a really great piece...i love the repetition of the last line, and how you changed it just a bit each time...great job!
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Post by Tania on Jan 26, 2004 6:20:20 GMT -5
This is a poem of survival and separation from a loved one. I like this poem especially as it depicts the everyday loneliness of ordinary lives. I really like this poem because it shows honest despair in a rich and resounding way. Simply beautiful. Tania
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Post by T.J. Barber on Feb 3, 2004 11:36:34 GMT -5
Great Job Melis. This is just about the best piece i've seen from you so far. Of course all of your others are very good as well. Great job
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