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angel Guest	Fire Jun 10, 2004 22:19:01 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Back to Top Post by angel on Jun 10, 2004 22:19:01 GMT -5 [glow=red,2,300]Intense heat- blazing- into the face All she could do- was laugh it off- but the flames- started licking- At the heart- the mind- the soul Leaving her personality- Charred [/glow]

Eclipse Apprentice It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time. Posts: 222	Fire Jun 10, 2004 22:57:35 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Eclipse on Jun 10, 2004 22:57:35 GMT -5 o i like the concept. the ending is great and the short lines help it flow really easily. nice write. p.s.-the red font fits nicely with the content of the poem.
	You saw what you get If you take what you take. Look in the eyes of the test. It's all because... Now there's a feeling I get. When I look to the left. But we can never be sensed. Our searching for a sign.

Mikepoet Virtuoso Posts: 487	Fire Jul 22, 2004 19:57:27 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Mikepoet on Jul 22, 2004 19:57:27 GMT -5 Quite flowing..not choppy at all..I agree about the red..