kt
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Post by kt on Apr 19, 2004 6:11:01 GMT -5
It goes on
Your words so sweet
such pretty poison
invoke a paradise
a toxic heaven
where i sway
in silent rhythm
to a tuneless beat
in a lonely prison
where frozen music
snaps its song
the icy melody
echoing long
about my mind
through dungeons deep
Dear God
stop this music
let me sleep
K x
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Post by bloodredtears on Apr 19, 2004 11:59:32 GMT -5
interesting piece...i could see it being performed in a coffee house with you wearing a beret and bongos in the back...it had that kind of beat...loved it!
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Seth
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Root Beer Float
Play something country!
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Post by Seth on Apr 23, 2004 13:52:24 GMT -5
Hm, I definitely agree with bloodredtears... Wonderful write...
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kt
Novice
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Post by kt on Apr 28, 2004 19:30:34 GMT -5
thankyou both, it's always heartening to recieve positive feedback... this poetry writing lark is hard work, isn't it?!
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Post by Mikepoet on Apr 30, 2004 10:07:31 GMT -5
I used to be there. I remember just let me sleep.
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amberputis
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~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~
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Post by amberputis on May 1, 2004 15:15:56 GMT -5
interesting but good  |
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Post by Mikepoet on May 5, 2004 20:21:29 GMT -5
You are such a good writer, I would like to be able to read this a few more times.
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