Last Dream

[Seth]

I will start reviewing people's poetry soon, but I just had to write this down before I forgot it...

A place of solitude and depression,
Full of yearning and sweet agression.

Wake up and regret your pathetic life,
As you wallow in your daily strife.

Listen closely to what the voices say,
This shall be another long day.

Happiness far from your ever dying grasp,
The same eternal pain that makes you gasp,

Cry once more and bleed just a little,
Wishing for love- calming and gentle.

Alas you scream out your painful agony,
Fading quickly, holding on to life dearly,

But this time nothing will be there when you wake,
For in this final dream, your life shall break.

[bloodredtears]

wonderful...there wasn't any one part that stood out for me...they were all equally good...i really enjoyed this one...great job!

[Deleted]

Depressing. Especially the last line. I thought that it was a nice ending. Anyway, great job.

[Sathien]

yes, beautiful ending. the last two lines really made impact. kudos for a well-written piece!

[SilverEyes]

This doesn't sound forced like some poetry I've read. I like the last life-ending stanza. Nice write.

[Hunter]

Very good.