Such A Cold Night

DeadByMorning
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shattered in lies, looking up to the crimson sky...above all is peaceful

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Such A Cold Night Mar 10, 2004 19:21:36 GMT -5

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Post by DeadByMorning on Mar 10, 2004 19:21:36 GMT -5

Touching your skin
Makes me freeze inside
I can't feel
The bite of the blade
As it's dragged over my skin
I'm petrfied
Maybe I'll never touch you again
Because of the numbness
Of your ice cold skin
Your heart beats true under,
But I can't get past
The piercing cold
That makes me want to
Rip my heart out
And dieAnd when I die
I'll escape this piercing cold and numbess
And then
I get to see the stars again
The ones I saw in your eyes so long ago
I get to see you smile again
Because no one can hurt us now
Never ever again
Because we're dead,
But until then,
I'm in the dark,
Spiraling downward
Without your kiss
I'm broken
Just a broken toy
For people to play with
Will you play with me?

~J

I wish I knew why I can't feel the words that slice so deeply into my wounded flesh.

John Barnett Founders Founder Posts: 994	Such A Cold Night Mar 11, 2004 15:44:36 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by John Barnett on Mar 11, 2004 15:44:36 GMT -5 Very nice, I really enjoy reading your work, you've got a lot of talent, keep it up!
	Jwalaeb

Eclipse Apprentice It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time. Posts: 222	Such A Cold Night Mar 11, 2004 17:27:36 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Eclipse on Mar 11, 2004 17:27:36 GMT -5 i like how you flowed your thoughts together. awesome write.
	You saw what you get If you take what you take. Look in the eyes of the test. It's all because... Now there's a feeling I get. When I look to the left. But we can never be sensed. Our searching for a sign.

sweetest17sin Virtuoso don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile! Posts: 252	Such A Cold Night Mar 11, 2004 23:04:35 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by sweetest17sin on Mar 11, 2004 23:04:35 GMT -5 nice job.
	somewhere there's someone who dreams of your smile and finds in your presence that life is worthwhile, so when you are lonely remember it's true; somebody, somewhere is thinking of you!

amberputis Virtuoso ~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~ Posts: 330	Such A Cold Night Mar 14, 2004 8:59:43 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by amberputis on Mar 14, 2004 8:59:43 GMT -5 different..good job
	Amber

SilverEyes Poet Laureate Silver eyes crying crimson tears. Posts: 609	Such A Cold Night Mar 31, 2004 23:17:49 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by SilverEyes on Mar 31, 2004 23:17:49 GMT -5 I like the sort of twist ending that the last line creates and how you explain the advantages vs. the disadvantages of suicide.
	You know I'm dying to live Until I'm ready I'm ready to die ~Jonny Lang~

X x K e l Z x X Chapter Leader Just Me Posts: 1,035	Such A Cold Night Apr 1, 2004 20:07:04 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by X x K e l Z x X on Apr 1, 2004 20:07:04 GMT -5 Love the ending, great write
	~~KelZ~~ Z e p h y r Poet Club Administrative Assistant

Post by DeadByMorning on Mar 10, 2004 19:21:36 GMT -5

Post by John Barnett on Mar 11, 2004 15:44:36 GMT -5

Post by Eclipse on Mar 11, 2004 17:27:36 GMT -5

Post by sweetest17sin on Mar 11, 2004 23:04:35 GMT -5

Post by amberputis on Mar 14, 2004 8:59:43 GMT -5

Post by SilverEyes on Mar 31, 2004 23:17:49 GMT -5

Post by X x K e l Z x X on Apr 1, 2004 20:07:04 GMT -5