-to f**king shreds- (unfinished)

[leash]

im feeling a little unstable,
on the verge
of
im not sure
EXPLODING!?
caving in to my rage
and just letting it all out.

it would feel so good
just to rip her
TO f**kING SHREDS
and not care at all.

f**k THE CONSEQUENCES.

i hunger
for her pain,
blood and raw fear
and the realization
that she cant be having
whats not hers to begin with.

f**k

f**k

f**k i cant cope.
its driving me up the wall.
i want to f**king scream.
i want to gouge the little pink hearts
right from her eye sockets
and spit them back at her.


______
the last few days have been a little rougher than usual.. looks like thats all it took to break my writers block.

[bloodredtears]

don't you love it when you get in such a rage you can't help but get over even the worst case of writers block?? kidding...this poem is great...it sux that something bad happens to make you write poetry, but i think that we're lucky that we get to read your beautifully written works no matter the circumstances!!! great job! hope things get better for you!

[leash]

thank you. that means a lot more to me than you may realize.

[SilverEyes]

I can hear the tone and volume of your voice change with every line. I like the fact that it so blunt and no nonsense. Great write and I hope things get better.

[amberputis]

a little shocking... in a very good way. I enjoyed this immensely. I also hope things get better for you, i know what it's like to be so angry, but this was overall very good.

[leash]

thanks guys. it looks like things are already starting to straighten out. thank you so much for the support. it is very much appreciated.

it looks like i am done here at poet club.. maybe i will see you all again some time in the future.

[pig]

i like the unstableness but conviction of emotion. it reminds me of a poem i wrote called "f***f***f***f***whywontyoudie?!"
which was pretty much the start and finsh of the peice
but this was good to read, i could feel the vent.
anyway
why are you going? your a moderator so i assume youve been here for a while?

[leash]

thanks, pig. much appreciated.

i pissed off the admins a bit. they basically told me to f*ck off and not come back. im not too sure why they havent taken away my moderator position yet.. probably forgot.

anyways.. if you want to check out any more of my poetry or any darker poetry for that matter you can check out my site if youre interested. theres a link in my profile.

again, thanks.

[Celestial]

Wow. So full of emotion. Just wow. that's all I can really say about it other than I reallylike it.

[Seth]

im feeling a little unstable,
on the verge
of
im not sure
EXPLODING!?
caving in to my rage
and just letting it all out.


f**k THE CONSEQUENCES.[/color]


Awesome write! The emotion- your rage- just bled so brillantly from this piece. Wonderful write indeed.

[leash]

thank you.

[Tania]

I just love this poem it just great. The rage is so poetic and honest. I can relate to it. This poem is beautiful in its anger and honesty.
I just this think it is great!!
Tania

[angel]

Very nice. Using the word "f*ck" just brings out the emotion into a higher level of tick-offed-ed-ness. reminds me of my poem "f*ck you"...and it makes me happy that I wasnt the only one to use that word, so yay. Nice imagry and description...especially of gouging eyes out...ouch. Just makes you want to know what on earth this person did you to you to make you so angry. Nice job.

[KG]

Being gay.

[rinna(on leave...for eternity)]

leash,
this was powerful. can't wait to see the complete work. maybe in a hopeless optimism, it will never be finished...
x rinna x