people who wake up early in the morning cause war

[pig]

somebody say something.
most people dont use their initiative
because nobody told them to.
well now im telling you,
say something.
this silence is ringing
within my ears
and my patience is wearing thin
and my patient is wearing nothing
and has gouged out her eyes in a hope
of seeing
what we cannot see.
to catch sight of enlightenment we will never reach
and of everything we cannot be.
im sick to the bone,
and im sick of this skin
and i sick of wanting to be free.
most people dont use their initiative because nobody told them to.
well now im telling you.
stand up for what you believe
but sit down until your told to.
sit still so they cant see you
dont breathe in until i do.

[SilverEyes]

Somehow, I'm reminded of propagada and communism at the same time. Interesting write

[bloodredtears]

i like how you tell people to do their thing, but yet stay silent until you tell them to...this is a good piece...i especially liked the 5th and 6th lines

[leash]

i like your style. interesting choice in subject matter.. i enjoyed it much. the middle portion of this piece proved to be the most captivating.. the imagery of the girl/woman gouging out her eyes to see what we cannot see was very effective.

nice work. i look forward to more.

[John Barnett]

That title really stands out, but very nice work. The title is actually very unique, and it's a plus. The work was very good, keep it up!

[amelie]

i agree with everything that has ben said. what it has above all else is originality, well done , dear

[T.J. Barber]

I actually agree with melis. This poem is full of originality and that is as John said, a plus. Your originality puts you out there in the standings with your poetry. Some of your work I have to say has been a bit controversial and confusing but, this one stood out because of it's originality. Good Job

[Eclipse]

Damn good piece!

well now im telling you.
stand up for what you believe
but sit down until your told to.
sit still so they cant see you
dont breathe in until i do.

really enjoyed that. i like the point you make. awesome write. you have a very interesting style.

[amberputis]

this was an exceptional write, i'm finding that your poems intrigue me, i really like your style. amazing...

[Celestial]

"and has gouged out her eyes in a hope
of seeing
what we cannot see.
to catch sight of enlightenment we will never reach
and of everything we cannot be. "

That has to be my favorite part of the poem. It means to me that people never want to see the truth because the truth hurts. Not always but that is what a lot of people may think. I could be wrong but that is how I saw this poem. Great work!

[::..::FoX::..::]

I liked this, the title was very catchy and almost humorous, very good indeed

[Seth]

A very very powerful piece... I agree with everything everyone has said -truly a magnificent write.

[rinna(on leave...for eternity)]

very effective, i liked the contradiction of freedom and following...
x rinna x

[X x K e l Z x X]

This is a very nice and interesting piece as the others have said, very truthful.