is this what happiness feels like?

[IMinsane]

I wish i'd seen
The absence of life
If only i could turn on the light
Darkness consuming all
A giant heart sinking in the abyss
I decided long ago
To lock myself away
To protect her from me
I love her therefore i die
She lives
I utter the words
"Let go"
The heart stops sinking
A hand breaks through the darkness
It grabs mine
I see her face
A smile forms on my own
My life is reborn
I live on....

[X x K e l Z x X]

This is great also

[IMinsane]

thanx

[Seth]

Cool piece. The format and flow are very intriguing and makes for a wonderful read. The last seven lines were my favs, though this was all nicely written.

[faithmairee]

I found this to be an intriguing poem as well. I liked everything about it. Your delivery was right on target. Great job!

faithmairee

[T.J. Barber]

Hmmmm.... I must agree that the point was right on target yet, I can't help but feel that there is something missing from this piece. Maybe it's just me ya know? It's like watching a really good movie, then it ends and you feel like you were let down or like something was missing? I truly enjoyed the piece but, still, something feels like it's missing.... Maybe i'll figure it out someday...

TJ

[IMinsane]

thanx people...
i'll try to think of something 2 add...
it was the first poem i ever wrote...
ummm...it was about 2 months and 5 days ago