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DeadByMorning
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shattered in lies, looking up to the crimson sky...above all is peaceful

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Not Our Fortunes Dec 7, 2004 0:19:34 GMT -5

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Post by DeadByMorning on Dec 7, 2004 0:19:34 GMT -5

This love beats fierce
Like a sexual vein
The addiction travels fast
Like a beast on a chain.

I crave your lips
Grazing my skin like silk
Your fingers raking my hair
Skin white and pale as milk.

I'm a slave to your love
The moment our lips touch
Every moment you're away
I beg for more, oh so much.

Your kiss is that of flames
Of double-edged razorblades
Your touch is searing poison
And goodbye the reaper bades.

Without you I wish I were dead
Caught in your spiderwebs of lies
Suffering withdrawals of you
Without you, how my heart cries.

I wish I knew why I can't feel the words that slice so deeply into my wounded flesh.

bloodredtears Legend I don't entirely think I've had enough rum to allow that kind of talk. Posts: 1,164	Not Our Fortunes Dec 7, 2004 11:11:01 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by bloodredtears on Dec 7, 2004 11:11:01 GMT -5 another really good poem..you have a lot of talent...i really like the fourth stanza and how you ended it "and goodbye the reaper bades" even though bades isn't a word you hear alot now i really like it....good job!
	Poetry copyright of Bloodredtears Summer has flown its nest, as the days swiftly turn to fall and we start to roost in the bosom of winter.

::..::FoX::..:: Poet Laureate Do you like my acid roc? Posts: 741	Not Our Fortunes Dec 8, 2004 7:08:35 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ::..::FoX::..:: on Dec 8, 2004 7:08:35 GMT -5 This is great DBM, great to see you back
	Scott F. Chandler Record Producer @ Acid Roc Records Recording Artist @ Acid Roc Records Perhaps next I'll be a Grammy winner!

undiscovered417 Novice look for the rainbow in every storm Posts: 6	Not Our Fortunes Dec 8, 2004 23:19:14 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by undiscovered417 on Dec 8, 2004 23:19:14 GMT -5 wow...great job!
	somewhere there's someone who dreams of your smile and finds in your presence that life is worthwhile, so when you are lonely remember it's true; somebody, somewhere, is thinking of you!

Alex'z Death Chic Apprentice \|\| Looks can be deceiving \|\| Posts: 241	Not Our Fortunes Dec 11, 2004 7:54:24 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Alex'z Death Chic on Dec 11, 2004 7:54:24 GMT -5 i like it...
	I'm a bad girl only when bad boys want me bad

NeverMore
Virtuoso

Beethoven Looking f*g

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Not Our Fortunes Dec 12, 2004 7:31:52 GMT -5

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Post by NeverMore on Dec 12, 2004 7:31:52 GMT -5

Yup, I concure.. another great work. I am confused why it is in this section, well sort of. The passion is sure here. But the scorn is strong too, stronger I think. Not sure if I would change it in your shoes though, all depends on what you felt when writing it. But it certainly makes one think. And to me, the sign of a great poet, is one who can write a work that makes one question the work and the writing at the same time as enjiying the read emensly. I do believe you got me on all points *S*

Awsome yet again!

DeadByMorning Novice shattered in lies, looking up to the crimson sky...above all is peaceful Posts: 24	Not Our Fortunes Dec 12, 2004 14:35:47 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by DeadByMorning on Dec 12, 2004 14:35:47 GMT -5 thank you everyone. it's kind of like an "I love you but I hate you" type of poem.
	I wish I knew why I can't feel the words that slice so deeply into my wounded flesh.

Post by DeadByMorning on Dec 7, 2004 0:19:34 GMT -5

Post by bloodredtears on Dec 7, 2004 11:11:01 GMT -5

Post by ::..::FoX::..:: on Dec 8, 2004 7:08:35 GMT -5

Post by undiscovered417 on Dec 8, 2004 23:19:14 GMT -5

Post by Alex'z Death Chic on Dec 11, 2004 7:54:24 GMT -5

Post by NeverMore on Dec 12, 2004 7:31:52 GMT -5

Post by DeadByMorning on Dec 12, 2004 14:35:47 GMT -5