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Dec 3, 2004 20:41:59 GMT -5
Post by John Barnett on Dec 3, 2004 20:41:59 GMT -5
Girl how you make me stare If I could touch your lovely hair And wrap my arms around your body Then kiss your lips and baby you've got me Lost in my head, lost in my heart An arrow hits my chest like Cupid's dart I am engulfed by your very presence A moment alone would be so pleasant To connect with you on an all new level When we are done you'll swear I'm the Devil But I'll treat you as though you were a goddess And build a temple for you, to be honest Deep inside your soul, you'll know That I will follow you wherever you go You may run and you may flee But I'll be there waiting, for you to touch me ...Again...
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Seth
Virtuoso
Root Beer Float
Play something country!
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Dec 3, 2004 21:25:22 GMT -5
Post by Seth on Dec 3, 2004 21:25:22 GMT -5
Hey, I like this... A lot. Awesome, has an eerie captivating-ish feel to it, at least it felt so to me. Lines 11 and 12 were my favorites, though there were many parts to this I very much enjoyed...
Wonderfully written.
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Dec 4, 2004 7:07:16 GMT -5
Post by Alex'z Death Chic on Dec 4, 2004 7:07:16 GMT -5
I love this so much.... this is one of my favorites here.... for me this were the best lines
"A moment alone would be so pleasant To connect with you on an all new level When we are done you'll swear I'm the Devil"
it kinda makes you raise your eyebrow and smirk... its witty and naughty... im fascinated... ;D
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Wickedblades666
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I Hate Life, but i am stuck in it by my own rules: death is for quitters, i dont quit...
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Dec 5, 2004 9:36:56 GMT -5
Post by Wickedblades666 on Dec 5, 2004 9:36:56 GMT -5
wow...i didnt get a captivity feel, i got more a of a worshiping feel, but then again, that is just the other end of captivity i guess, or at least in this senario...Great write
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Dec 6, 2004 18:53:42 GMT -5
Post by John Barnett on Dec 6, 2004 18:53:42 GMT -5
Thank you for the complimants, that's the first poem that I've wrote in quite some time. I was afraid I might have gotten a little rusty, but your words have lifted my inspiration. Thanks again,
John
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Dec 7, 2004 7:07:11 GMT -5
Post by ::..::FoX::..:: on Dec 7, 2004 7:07:11 GMT -5
This is great work John, good to read your work again. Keep it up!
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Mwalvbk
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I came from the fire, now I'm here to burn
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Jan 5, 2005 0:17:44 GMT -5
Post by Mwalvbk on Jan 5, 2005 0:17:44 GMT -5
Very sensual this is, I enjoyed it too, nice job!
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