Britni
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And when the drops of dew moisten your skin, Do you think of me at all?
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Post by Britni on Jun 24, 2004 23:44:54 GMT -5
it's funny how things, never seem to change, when you look at them, day-by-day, but a year from now, you can't help but say,
how did it change, before my eyes, without me noticing, the switch of the tides, and while it altered, where was i, when the world around me, changed my life?
it seems like yesterday, nothing was the same, what's big today, was once just a game, but looking back, you can't help but say,
how did it change, before my eyes, without me noticing, the switch of the tides, and while it altered, where was i, when the world around me, changed my life?
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Post by angel on Jun 26, 2004 23:55:18 GMT -5
oooh I like this. It flows extremely well
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Post by _black phoenix_ on Jul 19, 2004 1:54:14 GMT -5
I agree with Invisible Angel.. This piece sounded very natural. You have quite a skill.
The punctuation(or lack of) really bothered me.
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