amberputis
Virtuoso
~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~
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Post by amberputis on Feb 22, 2004 14:24:36 GMT -5
I took a drink it was my first taste They aren't the ones to judge in the first place It was amazing how good we started off Until we got stuck and f***** things up Now we're hardly even speaking and my heart will not stop aching I lie in bed, thinking of you alone to decide what next I'll do so I inhale deeply then exhale softly my mind has traveled so far, I don't know where I don't like to lie, so I admitt I'm scared Can we start over please? Rewind to the very first scene I'd take back half the things I've said and done Life would be better, be much more fun I wish we'd both say sorry then we wouldn't have to worry But I guess life doesn't hold what I want so I take his s*** and pack it all away then I inhale deeply exhale softly now my heart is in a shot glass so I stir it up, and drink it fast I took a drink it was my last taste Maybe they were right in the first place But still, I can't help but wonder how your feeling Are you still broken, or are you healing? I've never been so hurt... I wanna run away forever I'm still in bed thinking of you When will I wake to find this untrue?
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sweetest17sin
Virtuoso
don't frown! you never know who's falling in love with your smile!
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Post by sweetest17sin on Feb 22, 2004 18:26:16 GMT -5
nice job on this one. i followed it perfectly. i loved the last four lines!
melissa!
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Post by SilverEyes on Feb 22, 2004 19:58:01 GMT -5
Cool lyrics, I especially like the part about drinking your heart from a shot glass.
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Post by bloodredtears on Feb 24, 2004 1:16:30 GMT -5
wonderful piece here...i also enjoyed the heart in a shot-glass part...great job!
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Post by richie on Feb 27, 2004 5:38:49 GMT -5
almost missed this amberputis, make a great song perfect metrical rhyme, I liked it very much. regards Richie.
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Post by Mikepoet on Mar 22, 2004 19:58:26 GMT -5
This was good stuff...I cannot write these long poems like this it is hard for me to keep it flowing as well..
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Post by X x K e l Z x X on Mar 30, 2004 20:28:23 GMT -5
This is a great song, I really liked this Amber.
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